Our wooden sanctuary absorbs
The yonder gentle splatter
Of the swaying waves that
Serenades the rain above
Our hammock lightly swings
A carefree soothing lullaby
To obliviate the burdens
We yearn to leave behind
Our tired souls deflate atop
The warm and patient breeze
Disturbed only by the chirping
Of a careless wandering bird
Our melded consciousness drifts
Into a timeless embracement of
Orgasmic indulgence that longs
To keep our paradise forever
Other thoughts at: One Single Impression and Monday Poetry Train Revisited
18 comments:
Paradise forever - sounds fine to me! Nice work...
Sounds like a cool place to be and you describe it so well poetically!
Now this is a place I would love to live the rest of my life in! Excellent ...
can i stay there!! ?
Paradise forever....The hunger for that is one I feel every day.
This sounds idyllic. It starts gently and rises to a crescendo.
Thank you for visiting my blog.
Carole (watermaid)
Ah, paradise, the great yearning of man. Maybe one day we'll achive it, but it would have to be communally, rather than a vision of one man. But then a thought: what would we do then?
paradise forever? that's only in our dreams but one can dream...
Our tired souls deflate atop
The warm and patient breeze
Disturbed only by the chirping
Of a careless wandering bird
This sounds like heaven...it makes me yearn for spring even more! What a beautiful read.
What a place to live in...
unconnected
BTW, I think you meant serenades
Almost a hypnotic beauty in your words! So delightful!
And I wanted to thank you so much for your kind words on my blog!
"that longs To keep our paradise forever"
Oh, if only those precious times could be saved to relive over again.
What a beautiful Paradise!
I needed no photo to see it...your pen did it so well.
That is paradise, indeed. May that memory never fade.
that's dreamy place to be.
lovely word painting.
Having your won paradise ...Lovely!
Very soothing, I was transported to your paradise as I read it!
sounds like a lovers private paradise... nicely painted picture
Cheers
Luke @ WordSalad
(mine are here -
To Ashes: http://wp.me/pTeVg-ca
Let Me: http://wp.me/pTeVg-bW
Indigenous: http://wp.me/pTeVg-bK
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