Monday, January 12, 2009

Our Paradise

Our wooden sanctuary absorbs
The yonder gentle splatter
Of the swaying waves that
Serenades the rain above

Our hammock lightly swings
A carefree soothing lullaby
To obliviate the burdens
We yearn to leave behind

Our tired souls deflate atop
The warm and patient breeze
Disturbed only by the chirping
Of a careless wandering bird

Our melded consciousness drifts
Into a timeless embracement of
Orgasmic indulgence that longs
To keep our paradise forever



Other thoughts at: One Single Impression and Monday Poetry Train Revisited

18 comments:

Tumblewords: said...

Paradise forever - sounds fine to me! Nice work...

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Sounds like a cool place to be and you describe it so well poetically!

Amias said...

Now this is a place I would love to live the rest of my life in! Excellent ...

floreta said...

can i stay there!! ?

SandyCarlson said...

Paradise forever....The hunger for that is one I feel every day.

carole said...

This sounds idyllic. It starts gently and rises to a crescendo.

Thank you for visiting my blog.

Carole (watermaid)

anthonynorth said...

Ah, paradise, the great yearning of man. Maybe one day we'll achive it, but it would have to be communally, rather than a vision of one man. But then a thought: what would we do then?

lissa said...

paradise forever? that's only in our dreams but one can dream...

Fledgling Poet said...

Our tired souls deflate atop
The warm and patient breeze
Disturbed only by the chirping
Of a careless wandering bird


This sounds like heaven...it makes me yearn for spring even more! What a beautiful read.

gautami tripathy said...

What a place to live in...

unconnected

BTW, I think you meant serenades

Greyscale Territory said...

Almost a hypnotic beauty in your words! So delightful!

And I wanted to thank you so much for your kind words on my blog!

me ann my camera said...

"that longs To keep our paradise forever"
Oh, if only those precious times could be saved to relive over again.

Maggie said...

What a beautiful Paradise!
I needed no photo to see it...your pen did it so well.

SandyCarlson said...

That is paradise, indeed. May that memory never fade.

Jingle said...

that's dreamy place to be.
lovely word painting.

scentofmyheart said...

Having your won paradise ...Lovely!

jessicasjapes said...

Very soothing, I was transported to your paradise as I read it!

lukepraterswordsalad said...

sounds like a lovers private paradise... nicely painted picture

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Luke @ WordSalad

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